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| Subject: Stray Sat Dec 27, 2008 5:53 pm | |
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Adalwolf Webmaster/Administrator
Approved Characters : Destur Posts : 676 Join date : 2008-03-26 Age : 31 Location : Queensland, Australia
| Subject: Re: Stray Sun Dec 28, 2008 7:17 am | |
| Looks good... Hate to be picky.... so I'll just pick on one bit NOTE: the underlined bit are just to help point out what im talking about "Years and years ago, a band of dog's who knew know boundaries were set astray.They fought against the human's for the freedom of all canines.But lost, now the relations of these mighty dogs, and the help from other loner or rogue dogs.As well wolves.""a band of dog's who knew"should be... "a band of dogs who knew"(No ' ) "who knew know boundaries were set astray"should be... "who knew no boundaries were set astray"(know is to have knowledge, no is... well, no.) (Would a better word to use then "set astray" be "set free"?) "the freedom of all canines.But lost, "this bit should be like... "the freedom of all canines, but lost."(The full stop & comma are switched, also note the space after the 'b') and this dosnt make sense "now the relations of these mighty dogs, and the help from other loner or rogue dogs.As well wolves"(I ran outta time to check anything else, its past midnight ) also, if u need any help moderating, administrating, ideas, error-checking, etc, just gimme a yell, I might sign up tomorrow... regards, adalwolf | |
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BK Moon
Approved Characters : Ibham Sadim Posts : 937 Join date : 2008-03-28 Age : 26 Location : Chilling with my horse :D
| Subject: Re: Stray Mon Jan 26, 2009 11:35 am | |
| I'm joining-as TwilightPrincess of course. | |
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Varya Administrator
Posts : 2005 Join date : 2008-03-28 Age : 27 Location : Colorado
| Subject: Re: Stray Mon Jan 26, 2009 5:11 pm | |
| I'll join as Vikenti, since the name Blue is already taken. | |
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BK Moon
Approved Characters : Ibham Sadim Posts : 937 Join date : 2008-03-28 Age : 26 Location : Chilling with my horse :D
| Subject: Re: Stray Thu Jan 29, 2009 8:21 am | |
| *Gasp* Who would do such a thing?! | |
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